Teenage Tragedy

Uriel · 01-06-2008, 04:11 PM

trigger pulled
drink it down
you feel such pain
white light and sound
now they all just watch and see
this a teenage tragedy

release it all
a razors kiss
wonder now
will i be missed
now they all just watch and see
this a teenage tragedy

a fathers foot
a mothers hand
2 deaths and jail
from angered stand
now they all just watch and see
this a teenage tragedy

(Ive already heard a lot about this one. Before you remark this is not meant to disturb or frighten, it is simply poetry.)

*G_Man* · 01-06-2008, 04:19 PM

So, where did this come from? Pretty strong stuff....

Uriel · 01-06-2008, 04:23 PM

I just sat here and thought
I felt poetic so I let my mind wander and my fingers just go
I find that the stuff thats "disturbing" gets a better response if that makes any sense

*G_Man* · 01-06-2008, 04:34 PM

Shock has its value. I would like to read some of your less shocking stuff, too, though.

Uriel · 01-06-2008, 04:40 PM

For sure

**Noodles** · 01-07-2008, 12:06 AM

I found it interesting, but not really disturbing. Lots of emotion from so few words is not easy.

**Sp00k** · 01-07-2008, 11:17 AM

Suicidal poetry? It is indeed powerful verse.

*Lisey* · 01-07-2008, 01:28 PM

Not necessarily disturbing....I like it.

Uriel · 01-07-2008, 07:37 PM

thank you

*Lisey* · 01-08-2008, 06:56 AM

When I was in high school I wrote quite a bit and most of my writings could be mistaken as disturbing. It's an outlet....doesn't necessarily mean you want to kill yourself or anyone else. I was always encouraged by my creative writing teacher...it can be a very healthy outlet.